Comments on: The Garden’s End http://cjwriter.com/2008/01/13/the-gardens-end/ The Blog of CJ Levinson Fri, 21 Nov 2008 05:31:07 +0000 http://wordpress.org/?v=2.6.3 By: brightfeather http://cjwriter.com/2008/01/13/the-gardens-end/#comment-409 brightfeather Mon, 14 Jan 2008 22:38:19 +0000 http://cjwriter.com/2008/01/13/the-gardens-end/#comment-409 <blockquote> Do you lie awake next to him Surrounded by your sorrows in the night? No one wanted this after so many years But your heart knows it’s the only way It’s too late to start again And too hard to say goodbye</blockquote> Bahwahaaaa ... your poem was so beautiful and evocative that it led me to weep. <strong>CJ: Thank you, brightfeather. I'm so grateful to know it touched you that much. It's a wonderful compliment. And that's the stanza I like the most, I think... it says so much in so few words. Thank you for the kind words.</strong>

Do you lie awake next to him
Surrounded by your sorrows in the night?
No one wanted this after so many years
But your heart knows it’s the only way
It’s too late to start again
And too hard to say goodbye

Bahwahaaaa … your poem was so beautiful and evocative that it led me to weep.

CJ: Thank you, brightfeather. I’m so grateful to know it touched you that much. It’s a wonderful compliment. And that’s the stanza I like the most, I think… it says so much in so few words.

Thank you for the kind words.

]]> By: B0bbyG http://cjwriter.com/2008/01/13/the-gardens-end/#comment-406 B0bbyG Sun, 13 Jan 2008 20:17:26 +0000 http://cjwriter.com/2008/01/13/the-gardens-end/#comment-406 I'm feeling sad now, but it's such a beautiful poem. I love the structure, and it has an almost songlike feel to it. A very, very moving poem. I'm in awe. <strong>CJ: Thanks, Bobby. I felt sad writing it too but I think even loss and longing have their own beauty, which was what I was trying to capture with the poem. My poetry always seems quite lyrical, which is funny as I don't feel as comfortable with songwriting... it's something I'll have to try more of. Thanks for your thoughts; I'm glad you liked it.</strong> I’m feeling sad now, but it’s such a beautiful poem. I love the structure, and it has an almost songlike feel to it.

A very, very moving poem. I’m in awe.

CJ: Thanks, Bobby. I felt sad writing it too but I think even loss and longing have their own beauty, which was what I was trying to capture with the poem. My poetry always seems quite lyrical, which is funny as I don’t feel as comfortable with songwriting… it’s something I’ll have to try more of.

Thanks for your thoughts; I’m glad you liked it.

]]> By: Colourful Vision http://cjwriter.com/2008/01/13/the-gardens-end/#comment-405 Colourful Vision Sun, 13 Jan 2008 20:16:57 +0000 http://cjwriter.com/2008/01/13/the-gardens-end/#comment-405 Interesting, CJ, about u saying that u were planning it to be a song because what I meant by enjoying the flow, swear to God, was that ur poem was flowing like a nice, sweet song and/or a waltz... <strong>CJ: That's interesting that it felt like a waltz, CV, because that's kind of how I imagined it as well; like two lovers sharing one last dance, the thoughts going through their minds... I'm glad that feeling's still there. My poetry tends to be quite lyrical, so I often play with the idea of writing more songs... but I'm not as comfortable with the structure, so it ends up being poetry anyway. If this was a song, it'd probably sound something like Coldplay's <em>The Scientist</em>... that's the kind of feel I'd want it to have.</strong> Interesting, CJ, about u saying that u were planning it to be a song because what I meant by enjoying the flow, swear to God, was that ur poem was flowing like a nice, sweet song and/or a waltz…

CJ: That’s interesting that it felt like a waltz, CV, because that’s kind of how I imagined it as well; like two lovers sharing one last dance, the thoughts going through their minds… I’m glad that feeling’s still there.

My poetry tends to be quite lyrical, so I often play with the idea of writing more songs… but I’m not as comfortable with the structure, so it ends up being poetry anyway. If this was a song, it’d probably sound something like Coldplay’s The Scientist… that’s the kind of feel I’d want it to have.

]]> By: Colourful Vision http://cjwriter.com/2008/01/13/the-gardens-end/#comment-408 Colourful Vision Sun, 13 Jan 2008 18:00:49 +0000 http://cjwriter.com/2008/01/13/the-gardens-end/#comment-408 Sadly beautiful, CJ...There is a very nice flow into it.. It seems like a feeling that has never been consumed and/or impossible to fulfill....But, ur words at Garden’s End are like a dream...Très beau!!! <strong>CJ: I'm glad you like the flow, CV. When I started writing this I was planning for it to be a song, but thought it would make a better poem... a lot of the flow comes from that. Interesting that you picked up on the feeling too... you're right, it's an unfulfilled memory, a feeling I'll probably always have. That's what the line about the garden's end means to me, the dream of another life. Thanks for your thoughts, CV, and the compliment. </strong> Sadly beautiful, CJ…There is a very nice flow into it.. It seems like a feeling that has never been consumed and/or impossible to fulfill….But, ur words at Garden’s End are like a dream…Très beau!!!

CJ: I’m glad you like the flow, CV. When I started writing this I was planning for it to be a song, but thought it would make a better poem… a lot of the flow comes from that.

Interesting that you picked up on the feeling too… you’re right, it’s an unfulfilled memory, a feeling I’ll probably always have. That’s what the line about the garden’s end means to me, the dream of another life.

Thanks for your thoughts, CV, and the compliment.

]]> By: museditions http://cjwriter.com/2008/01/13/the-gardens-end/#comment-407 museditions Sun, 13 Jan 2008 05:25:48 +0000 http://cjwriter.com/2008/01/13/the-gardens-end/#comment-407 Waaaah! (That's me, weeping). You have a way of uniting that within each of us that has experienced heart-brokenness, yet keeping the sentiment uniquely your own. Very beautiful, evocative, devastating. <strong>CJ: Thanks, Muse. That means a lot to me; I was trying to give it a feeling that anyone could relate to, not just my own experience, so I'm glad you found that. When I was writing it, I was thinking about a friend who had died, and it's as much about death as longing... I think that's the magic of words, that they can reach out and touch people in different ways. Thank you for your kind words, as always. </strong> Waaaah! (That’s me, weeping). You have a way of uniting that within each of us that has experienced heart-brokenness, yet keeping the sentiment uniquely your own.
Very beautiful, evocative, devastating.

CJ: Thanks, Muse. That means a lot to me; I was trying to give it a feeling that anyone could relate to, not just my own experience, so I’m glad you found that.

When I was writing it, I was thinking about a friend who had died, and it’s as much about death as longing… I think that’s the magic of words, that they can reach out and touch people in different ways.

Thank you for your kind words, as always.

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